Wiki+Sites+We+Tried


 * Wikispaces.com**
 * Easy to navigate, learn
 * Help pages and video tours
 * Free to educators
 * Don't need email addresses
 * Can easily sign up an entire classroom
 * Tech help very responsive to email questions/needs (even though time difference due to being in CA)
 * Wikispaces welcomes suggestions for improving


 * PBwiki.com**
 * was called PBwiki, now called PBWorks
 * Not sure why I went with Wikispaces when I first started but am comfortable with Wikispaces and so less likely to change.

Wiki created by Mrs. M with Grade 6 ELA class: http://mmsgr6lamrsm.wikispaces.com/

Wiki created by Mrs. Y with Grade 6 ELA class: http://lawithmrsyork0910.wikispaces.com/ http://lawithmrsyork2012.wikispaces.com/

Wiki from 2008 on Nature's Classroom.


 * Student comments** to other students within Mrs. York's Grade 6 class wiki (2010-11) on writing done on the wiki: [[file:wiki comments.doc]]
 * Wow, your fav p is very descriptive. Similies and fantastic word choice gave me a vivid and clear picture in my mind as I read it. One of your sentences is a bit confusing. As he stepped through the front door, I had become scared is the confusing sentence,to me. Maybe if you said,"As he stepped through the front door, I instantly became frightened!" That is the only suggesting I have for you. Great peice!


 * Your sentences are great but i can't tell wich is wich-


 * Your favorite descriptive sentence is descriptive but it doesn't realy make sense


 * Ds.They went back home with a stomach that might expode into million 's of pices that would go to China and never come back !Ts. It was 11:00 on Halloween night and a pumkin named Nicholas was a moth old baby.fav.p Nicholas has one best friend named sandra. She's a girl that is 11 years old, she could wal and talk and she giggles at Nicholas's jokes. She things his jokes are funny too.fs Nicholas wanted to have pizza for dissert ice cream, jello, candy, muffins, pies, brownies, cakes, cookies, and a Halloween special.


 * My descriptive sentence frommy pumpkin piece is "You might know Gandolf as the great wizard in the "Lord of the rings" that watches out for Frodo who tends to get into a lot of mischief.My topic sentence is "You might know Gandolf as the great wizard in the "Lord of the Rings" that watches out for Frodo who tends to get into a lot of mischeif.My favorite paragraph is "You might know Gandolf as the wizard in the Lord of the Rings" that watches out for Frodo who tends to get into a lot of mischeif. You might know him as the pumpkin that changes into a carriage in "Cinderella" to bring her to her dance with he charming, handsome, young prince. You might know Gandolf as bothe of these things but i know know gandolf in a special way. I know Gandolf as a legend.


 * I love your writing. As I said early, it is amazing. Sadly Mrs. York wants us to write suggestions. But I can't! Sorry nothig is bad about this paragraph.


 * I love your writing! It is so good! Eyeball-os sound tasty! I'm going to buy some they sound so good! I have to agree with the school part to!!


 * I liked your favorite paragraph because I really could picture your pumpkin, Chesnut, rotting away. I mean, squirrels really do eat pumpkins, so I liked how you connected that fact to your own life. One suggesting that I have is maybe add how Chesnut feels as he's getting rottened away.
 * I liked how you mentioned things from Chesnutt's past by saying his old nickname was Chez. I'm sure your story is filled to the prim with these details.


 * I like all of your sentence, but I really like, "I would make their steps gleam and radiate through the gloomy night." the best. My suggestion is don't make these sentences so long.


 * This is my favorite paragraph in the whole story:Then Bobert, the 2 year old pumpkin, heard something. Bobert the curious pumpkin, then looked over and saw a little baby pumpkin getting ready to open his eyes for the first time. He then wobbled over and saw this pumpkin miracle happen. He watched this in amazement! He had never seen a pumpkin open his eyes before. I like this because it is descriptive. Also it is a little repetitive. You may want to say "Then Bobert, the 2 year old pumpkin, heard something. Being the curious pumpkin that he is, Bobert then looked over and saw a little baby pumpkin getting ready to open his eyes for the first time. He then wobbled over and saw this pumpkin miracle happen. He watched this in amazement because he had never seen a pumpkin open his eyes before."


 * Then Bobert, the 2 year old pumpkin, heard something. Bobert the curious pumpkin, then looked over and saw a little baby pumpkin getting ready to open his eyes for the first time. He then wobbled over and saw this pumpkin miracle happen. He watched this in amazement! He had never seen a pumpkin open his eyes before. I think this is a really amazing paragraph, it's so meaningful, if you know what I mean. I think it's very ummm, what's the word, I'll go with amazing. I bet it would be a miracle to watch a baby open it's eyes for the first time. I don't think there would be words more descriptive than the ones she used to describe the pumpkin hearing something then seeing this miracle, I don't think someone could have described it better, espeacially if they witnessed an actual baby open it's eyes for the first time. To be simple, I'm saying there are no descriptive words for that kind of moment. I've witnessed both my younger brothers open their eyes for the first time, and it's amazing. It is a true miracle, because there are tons of babies that never do open their eyes, and I guess it just kind of touched me, because I've witnessed that kind of thing, and it should touch anybody who's witnessed a baby open it's eyes for the first time, and realized later that tons of babies never do open their eyes and see the world they will be living in, because they never will live in this world. One thing I would check is if pumpkins have eyes. Haha just kidding, my real suggestion is to be more specific as to what Bobert hears, does he hear a giggle, a laugh, crying, the mother cooing her newborn, what kind of thing does Bobert hear?


 * As soon as she licked her fingers a bright red tomato wearing a black karate suit grabbed Emily and ran.Great sentence! It felt as if I were right there! Shouldn't there be a comma after fingers??